The Alliance Alive is a SaGa game made by sane people and is good
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- West Filly
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"Hey I'm the guy who nearly ran you over. I hope you can trust me to pilot complicated machines alongside you in critical missions..."
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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I can't tell if this was deliberately written to be ambiguous (i.e. if she's saying "forget it ever happened" or "forget your chances about joining our team") or if the writer just got super lucky
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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I'm glad that in Visual Novel World, every male is completely incapable of reading social cues
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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So is Shou gonna be even worse at socializing than us
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Man I've been asking the same damn question
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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I suppose that's the best answer we could have hoped for.
By the way, the last time I did this, I wore the helmet, and sped off without helping her. If you do that, in this scene Kaori is trying to figure out who almost hit her, and if you fess up to it, she gets real mad and refuses to let you join the team. Who knows how the story actually plays out when that happens.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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I'm pretty sure Shou's bro-ness is going to drive me insane by the end of this thread.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Not really! I've kind of had too much exposition already!
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Of course, this means that old team is gonna be our rivals, and we have to fight them in the final scene
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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If Kaori wants to be a dating candidate, she's gonna need to do a better job of dunking on Shou than that
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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So Shou and Kaori are long-time teammates, Mayu is a popular first year who joined because...
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Oh, that's why Mayu wasn't supposed to be a romance path. She was supposed to bone down with Shou.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Jake, I don't think the question is whether you can get along with her
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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And Jake accepts the invitation, and then people spend like 10 text boxes saying goodbye, and then there's another 10 text boxes about Jake getting on his bike and riding home and then
oh god dammit, the plot roadblock just isn't gonna go away, is she
oh god dammit, the plot roadblock just isn't gonna go away, is she
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EAGLE mechs and creepy sisters, whoop whoop what a good time
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- RudeCyrus
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Jesus Christ, all amateur writers need to fucking read some guides, because they commit the same mistakes.
1. Cut adverbs.
2. Cut weak adjectives like "very" or "somewhat."
3. Cut any unnecessary words, scenes or actions.
Almost every sentence I've read in this VN (and others) could be rewritten to be much better. The characters and story would still suck, but at least it wouldn't be a chore to read.
1. Cut adverbs.
2. Cut weak adjectives like "very" or "somewhat."
3. Cut any unnecessary words, scenes or actions.
Almost every sentence I've read in this VN (and others) could be rewritten to be much better. The characters and story would still suck, but at least it wouldn't be a chore to read.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Is my brain so damaged when I thought that the writing in this game wasn't abominably badRudeCyrus wrote: βSat May 05, 2018 8:26 pmJesus Christ, all amateur writers need to fucking read some guides, because they commit the same mistakes.
1. Cut adverbs.
2. Cut weak adjectives like "very" or "somewhat."
3. Cut any unnecessary words, scenes or actions.
Almost every sentence I've read in this VN (and others) could be rewritten to be much better. The characters and story would still suck, but at least it wouldn't be a chore to read.
- West Filly
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I'm glad that they had Shou invite us into a team with one empty space. I thought they were going to have us find or choose three people to form a new team, dragging us through each one of the characters individually. With the pace being how it is, can you blame me?
- West Filly
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Maybe I'm slow on the uptake here. It just occured to me that the parking permit / parking space issues were an attempt to foreshadow the issue you're about to have with finding a team.
It's super clever.
It's super clever.
I'm not a writer but I need to apply this to my posting. Very guilty here.RudeCyrus wrote: βSat May 05, 2018 8:26 pmJesus Christ, all amateur writers need to fucking read some guides, because they commit the same mistakes.
1. Cut adverbs.
2. Cut weak adjectives like "very" or "somewhat."
3. Cut any unnecessary words, scenes or actions.
Almost every sentence I've read in this VN (and others) could be rewritten to be much better. The characters and story would still suck, but at least it wouldn't be a chore to read.
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It's what you get when you play bad VNsFartlord Dunktronix wrote: βSat May 05, 2018 8:38 pmIs my brain so damaged when I thought that the writing in this game wasn't abominably bad
- Gloomy Rube
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Me, before this point: I like how the little sister is actually getting a vaguely realistic relationship with the main character with all the teasing and being goofy at each other.
Me, now: what the poop is this poo poo
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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why
why do i have to sit through this
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Just call me Sherlock
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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What is bolognese anyway
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Yes, there's going to be a whole dialogue about how we figured out pasta
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Look at all this effort that went into this boring thing
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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This is just going to keep dragging
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Why is it that the character we can't date gets like 100x characterization as everyone else
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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"She can't hold back her smile"
god
please
just
ugh
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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What are the chances that any of the dateable girls are this fleshed out?
- West Filly
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This spaghetti had better be important later.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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WHY DOES THIS CHARACTER GET SO MUCH DETAIL
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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OH MY GOD
WHO CARES